The Art of Eating by Chelsey Alden
I watch you / bite into a strange fruit /
Suck on the seed that is pink / like a
pomegranate bead /
I watch you / peel back the smooth
skin / Wipe the dripping juice from
your chin / You hold my eyes / then /
You lick the pink meat of this / My
skin / My throat closes / as you start
sucking on the seed again /
My eyes shut / and body quivers /
The sensation of a whisper
Well. This is obviously about sex. But, I loved how the author threaded the lustful themes with the act of eating fruit. She had a seamless way of intertwining the two elements. It felt like she was trying to say so much more than the surface plot of sex and fruit. I aim to do that in my own writing constantly. Like with this piece I'm writing now, a murderer is holding 2 women captive on a train. The audience doesn't know if he's crazy or just troubled and searching for answers. So I have to intertwine his monologue about his tendency to kill with this internal struggle. I also enjoyed the structure of her poem, how she used dashes and broke traditional line structure. Sometimes I worry my writing is too formulaic.. like I rely on the traditional structure too much and don't break the rules enough. Granted, I don't write as much poetry but I think that other genres of writing can reveal a lot about your own. There's ways to break the rules in screenwriting just like in poetry - creating images people don't normally see, like with the short "you seen my goat". Doing the unexpected is sometimes the most effective tool for making you audience pay attention to what you have to say because it's when you do something completely out of the norm that people realize this is what's important.
Alden, Chelsey. “The Art of Eating.” Glyph. 25 (2013): 131. Print. 24 October 2016.